Folded Away **OM's pick of the week**
(I know this isn't a workshop setting but I made a couple edits. Thanks for your patience) Your leaving was like folding away sheet music. A folk song given back to the lines, no longer heard. My...
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There sings in this beautiful poem, a family connection. But how wonderfully you create it..."Your leaving was like folding away sheet music. A folk song given back to the lines, no longer heard." And...
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Jesse, Thank you a million times for the fact that you enjoyed it and the beautiful encouragement. I truly appreciate it. You saw what I wanted seen!
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OK cass, I hope your female. Because I referred to you as such. Went by the picture....anyways. I really like the way you teeter along the edge with how you meant the poem to convey. That next level...
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Hi Wayne, yes, I'm female but I'm also confused! What didn't you understand here? Is there something that is blurred? I really want to know. It's about someone leaving and how the ---well, you let me...
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On third read...your changes are effective...this time I am struck by the Guitar line...giving your shadow...that is fantastic, and it is something my dear crone mother likes to tell me. I am struck...
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Jesse, I probably a serious writer, because I usually end up submitting somewhere! I'm glad you liked that guitar line, it was just my way of saying someone is playing the guitar. I did change "olive"...
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O this is beautiful....For me, partly because the precise relationship is not defined. Brilliantly written and re-written, the language is from the mind-heart. Thank you, true Poet. - Dave
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Thank you so much for coming by! Dave, I really appreciate it.
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I have followed this lovely poem and seen many others of your works since coming back to poetry...this is a great poem to show and how a poet often edits things...a good poetic practice....
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you speak of water it gets my attention.. rivers flow its their own understanding an inclination for the sea abiding time like a revolution of the earth sorting it in eddies rips frothed judgement...
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cass, this is a helluve write, deeply emotional yet detached, almost as if this was an out of body experience with you watching all these events & writing about them almost matter of factly, yet...
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Your unique style cass holds the attention start to finish and paints a picture I can visualise particularly liked thr introduction of granchidren signifying continuation
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I love the opening lines and the melancholy ending is pensive but beautiful!
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Cass, I enjoyed this poem very much. It is not vague in my opinion. It is soft, it speaks of love and loss and missing someone. We do wonder what they are doing at times and you said that beautifully...
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